Blog post due -- what do you need to revise on your drafts to show more clarity, conviction, commitment, emotion, and overall strengthen your performance. Be specific on what you need to revise and why.
I think in order to let our draft more clarify, I think the relationship between each character should be some lines that can show the relationship between Ma and Eric or Ma and Caroline. Include some arguments, some monologues, or conversations can present the relationship very well. In our draft, I remember that we have to use triangles in the performance. I think it's very hard to let the audience know what is the use of the triangles. In the performance, we want to the triangles as a house or a wall. When I and Eric have a conversation in scene four, I and Eric will stand in the different sides of the triangles. I think we need to think more about how can we show the triangles to make it more clear. Or we can just explain to the audience before we perform. I think in the first draft of our performance, I didn't do a good job on performing Ma in scene five. In scene five Ma should have a monologue talking about the conviction, commitment, and emotion. For conviction, when I was watching the videos I can't notice conviction as an audience. I should add some body language and facial expression when I say my lines. Such as when I talk about changing my opinion of Eric I should show like I'm not willing to, but I have to. In Ma's monologue, she has some lines that are talking to Caroline. I think I should add body language to express Ma loves Caroline. I'm also thinking about to add one more scene to make the play fully. In scene six I don't think the play ended. because the teddy bear hasn't given it to Caroline. I planned to let Ma and Eric have a conversation in order to let Eric help Ma give the Teddy bear back to Caroline.
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